Michael’s Blog
Sweet. Couldn’t agree more. Has a great relaxed tone with an aggressive undertone that gives the “I don’t care what you think” look. The flow and transitions match perfectly with his personal reflection. He also (unintentionally) rips the points in Catherine’s Blog to shreds. He discusses fear as amotivator which is one of the primary building blocks of human nature
Catherine’s Blog
I’m not sure that finding yourself through fear is the best idea. However it can be helpful to release emotions this way and this can calm those who lose sleep at night when their thoughts run never-ending circles around the inside of their skulls. This sample was obviously written by someone who has conflicting views to those around her and feels she might be judged due to her uncomfortableness in the essay. If you’re afraid to express yourself amongst friends maybe its time to find some new ones.
I'm not sure if the section you wrote about my work is constructive criticism or a personal attack. This is not the Enquirer, I don't think you needed to take your ideas about my style of writing and turn them into a judgement about the type of person I am or the type of people my friends are... I wouldn't say "my thoughts run never-ending circles around the inside of my skull at night" or that" I have conflicting views to those around me"; But I guess you think this of me. My piece was simply an english assignment and you should not have learned much about my friends or me by reading a paragraph about writing....
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